Sora the Mage: Plotline More Refined
Main Points of Interest
You as being the main writer now, can do anything you please with plot that you think will make it better. Or be easier for you in the ling run. Espeshaly on dialog, when it comes to the people saying meaningful things, I get too m ushy and cliché sometimes. SO don’t feel bad about smacking me and my corniness.
And if you wish I can be your beta, I LOVE betaing. Or if something stumps you about the plot that my not be clear, just tell me via Livejournal, and I can clarify.
Also, as a feature I added, Mickey is human in this fic. I didn't want to write about a big shoed mouse saving the day… And he creeps me out. But I couldn't really think of anyone better to make the keyblade, so I made him human. And a Bishi at that! (scary thought, yes?)
{words} = are scenes I wrote out. There usialy of key interest, plot movement, special scene, or just too darn cute. Mainly I did this to also give you a feel of the main characters, and how they react to certin things that I can express in plain raw plot. Heh ^.^;
(words) = Afterthought or main/important point.
The Plot; Is Oh So Thick
Kingdom Hearts Castel of the humans and Hollow Bastion Castel of the Vampires had been locked in a long going war for dominants over the other. Fuled by a deep lying hate for the other going back many a year. The Vampires wanted the humans as there slaves and food, and the Humans wanted to eradicate the 'demons' from 'there' land.
But alas, it was a war the humans were loosing. And in there darkest hour the previous king killed himself, cretin apoun there imminent annihilation. But soonafter, with the Vampire army at there gates. A powerful mage named Micky steped up in there time of need and saved all in Kingdom Hearts Castel. King Micky stood up agenst the Vampire leader Sheparoth, with his powerful Keyblade he forged himself. And with this sword could even kill the ancient Sepharoth himself with one blow to the heart.
But instead of annihilating the vampires, he instead managed to make a truce with them. And Sepharoth, after a weighing the pros and cons excepted. And during the shaky truce, Micky and Sepharoth met a total of 30 times going over all the rules of this truce. The first of witch was the vampires stayed in there land and the humans there's. And they were to feed on the blood of animals.
And over this time they found a bit of respect for each other. (But they were not friends.)
But during this, Micky fell terribly ill, for when forging the weapon to be strong enough for its dire task, he gave it so much of himself his life was cut in half. So not to unsettle anyone about his condition he stayed to his quarters. It was in his room King Micky saw an evil potential in the Keyblade. He knew in the wrong hands it could undo them all, so to ensure it would go into the hands of someone with a pure heart, he gave it to his adopted son Sora. And sealed its power into the shape of a silver crown pendant. So it could not be wielded with out it, and linked to a pure heart.
That and he also knew if he just destroyed it, there was a chance of future fights. And it would be needed. (Ooo oh so crafty)
Hed adopted the boy named Sora, and started teaching him, magic. (Raising him to be a good person really.)
But on the day the contract was sealed, he was killed in his weakened state buy his Head Mage Ansem; determined to have the Keyblade for himself.
But unbeknownst to Ansem, he left the Keyblade to Sora and magically bound it to the boy in the shape of a silver crown necklace. And the only person other then himself that knew about Sora and the Crown necklace was Dizz, his most trusted friend; who was also helping to raise Sora to be the next great king that this dark time needed so badly. (Someone to keep the pace between the lands.)
After the Kings death Soras crushed, and is now taking regular lessons with his long time friend Liaf Cipé.
After Ansem killed the King, he was bent on finding where Micky had hid the key. And to complete his plans he was determent to get rid of Sora and Dizz. The only people that knew in depth of the Keyblade And Micky. And Dizz was starting to expect Ansem for the Kings death. So he sent Dizz off in an 'urgent' meeting to one of there towns on the outskirts of there land. And sent his cronies after him to make Dizz's death look like a raid gone bad. (Because he couldn't have killed Dizz himself without anyone in the castle noticing."
All was that was left was Sora now, so at the newly annual Ballroom Party to honor the piece between them, he did it. When Sepharoth and his son Riku were preparing to leave, he gave them Sora as a 'parting gift.' Much to the shock to the vampires and the remaining people in the Ballroom;
{"I mean you must be famished after this long day of dancing. So Ill have Sora help you on your way home." He finished almost mockingly.
Shaparoth gave him a deathly glare, "Watch your toung human, for you threaten the very foundation your King died for."}
But further more surprisingly to Separoths subordinates he accepted the boy. Sepharoth was no fool, he knew Ansem was sending the boy to his death. And with Ansems eagerness that didn't go unnoticed by Sepharoth (being a vampire and all). Ansem was all too eager to be rid of the boy. And he knew the boy would still be send to his death if he refused. Even if though other means then this.
He had seen this boy at Mickys side more then once during there many meetings. So he was now curious what this seemingly innocent boy had done for this obvious death sentence. (That and he was interested in human magic, the boy was clearly a mage. But that comes in later.) He was determined to figure this puzzle out.
{(After the meeting and back at the chariots to go home) Riku paused staring at the pale faced boy, he looked like he just had the very ground and sky ripped away from him and was left with the cold reality of things. He caught his fathers arm as he was entering is chariot, something was amiss and his father knew something. "And what is to happen to the boy?"
"Oh Yes, him." The silver haired man scrutinized the boy lazily and his green gaze made Sora sqwerm. And after a brief contemplation, he answered. "He'll be yours to do with as you please. But I'm most certainly not going to be expected to be fed like a mere dog begging for scraps. And neither should any of you." He said finally as he stepd into his own chariot. And promptly shut the door in Rikus face.
"W-what!? This further confused him, was it just him or was that a threat? And now he had to look after the boy? Riku had a sour look on his face.
Axel gave a laugh and patted Riku on his shoulder, "Well it looks like your baby sitter now. You get to see to it, he even makes it to the Castel." The silvered haired boy gave him an exasperated look. He was not looking forward to that task, seeing the servens looking at Sora like a huge cake. "Not funny Ax, my dad knows something and I'm going to find out." And just as Axel was heeded to another chariot Riku stopped him. "But you also get to help with babysitting duty."
"Aww man!"}
Shortly after the Vampires departure, Dizz had returned from his mission in the outer towns, witch was only a rouge demon eating livestock. Something a newbie mage could vanquish. He knew something was up for he was attacked on the way back home. And his suspicions were confirmed when he herd news of Sora. And furious, went to Ansems office to demand an explanation. But before bursting into the doors, he over heard Ansem talking to (much to his surprise) one of the guards that had attacked his caravan coming home from his short expedition; and Ansems guards bared the same crest. But before he could tell outhers, alas he was caught spying.
{The two guards jerked his arm behind his back, and forced him to one knee. Then the cold dawning hit him. And it all clicked, the Kings untimely death, Soras sudden deparcher, and the attack by the castles own guards. "So it was you. You killed the King, had Sora sent to his death, and had me ambushed to finish me off! You betrayed your people and your friend! How could you!?"
Ansem sneered and the mention of the king as friend, and his cold eyes settled on Dizz as though staring at a pile of trash. "For the Keyblade, for the power, it's that simple. And the three of you were they only thing standing in my way of a smooth road to perminent crowning." He spat out angerly. "To think the King could have wiped out the vampire scum with the blade, and failed to, is sickening. Instead he, made a truce!? Piece with the vampires is a fairytale dream."
"The king didn't think so."}
Ansem had Dizz stabbed, and commanded him to be disposed of as he left, but Dizz's dyeing laughter caught him off guard. (That and that would just creep anyone out.)
"Is funny, because the Keyblade will never work for you now… only for…"
"What is this rubbish you speak of?" Ansem said seemingly disinterested, but the creeping feeling he felt in his chest was all too real.
"Heh, his son…" And with that Dizz died.
Ansems mind was in a cataclysmic turmoil. 'What!? But he never had a son!'}
(Kisandora: @.@ My brain is fried! I spent three hours straight straying to summarize the plot into an understandable format, because my original notes are a chaotic order that would melt you brain! But I have to take a break, and reorganize my thoughts for the rest of the plot. Its there, just very unorganized. That and my sis is rushing my off the comp -.- But tell me what you think! =^.^=)
In the next part of the plot to come
The day after they made it back to there castle. Riku has a hard time keeping the vampires away from Sora, and there's one good close call. And surly more vamps trying to get a taste of Sora now that Humans off the menu. Riku only has a handful of vampires he can trust. Axel one of them.
Sepharoth gathers information about Sora, and has his own suspicions the newly appointed King Ansem is up to.
Soras best friend Liaf from Kingdom Hearts Castel is killed. Found drained by a vampire.